sarac @hyearout Way to broad need to tell how it affects the end and how it confuses the charcter

Christenw @MarisaW this is good because of your literary, analysis and it has an arguement.

denisev @christines this is good. the way you included all three parts is awseome

MarisaW @christines this is good its specific and has enough information.

hyearout @samp good! maybe try to tell about a specific irong.. like dramatic or verbal

kellyn @MarisaW I think it is a little too specific and would be hard to write an essay on.

AndrewG @Christenw i cant imagine what the paper would be about. would it be about describing the events or like retelling the story?

kaileek @MarisaW This might be a little too specific with mentioning the tree falling, and could you write a story all on the tree falling?

zache @christines it doesn't really answer the so what question.

kers @MarisaW To indepth, you gave only one specific example so you couldn't like right an essay over it.

christines @kellyn what emotions though?

Christenw @hyearout you could be more specific on the situational irony in the story.

MeganC @samp yeah you could easily write about this and be specific in your topic sentences

malloryg @hyearout you still have the 'so what' hanging off the end. Make the thesis more relevant.

kellyn @christines This is good. It uses all 3 parts and would be a good thesis to write a paper on.

christines @kaileek needs more of an argument

kaileek @denisev This is a little broad, you could possibly focus in on one or two specific parts.

kers @samp This is good but there is nothing to argue about.

SydneyG @christines This is really good. I great job covering all 3 of the parts.

zache @hyearout good try to be more specific (: